I am of mixed feelings about this story. It was just OK for a very long while, then the purported big reveal, then a REALLY big reveal, all with some weirdness mixed in. I was gonna down grade because of that, but I DID kinda tear up at the end, so that's a plus. But mostly, the author's note afterwards On Dogs And Stories was VERY moving!
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I [...} lay there thinking this was a very stupid way to die. -- Been there, thought that!
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I don't quite have the way of poetry in my head -- Nice sentence, I don't either.
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fifing three quivers -- "Firing" maybe? Typo?
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I walked to the end of a lonely pier jutting into the eye of a narratively convenient storm coming in off the North Sea and hid my tears in the wind and the rain. -- Just a lovely sentence!